Interactive Holmes

Act 1


Scene 1:

ZOEI: My lady, Mr Mudlly had come.
EMILY: Thank you for telling me. You may let him in.
(Mr. Mudlly enters)
MR. MUDLLY: Oh my, lady Emily you are as charming as ever. (Turns the head to Zoei) You can go now.
(She is staying and watching lady Emily)
MR. MUDLLY: I said go! You filty ma-
(Lady Emily intrerupts him)
EMILY: Zoei, please go and make a tea for Mr. Mudlly and me!
ZOEI: Yes my lady.
(She goes)
(Mr. Mudlly walks angry)
EMILY: And what bussines does it bring you here, today?
MR. MUDLLY: I’ve come to remember you that tomorrow is my sister birthday party.
EMILY: Oh! Of course I’ll come with pleasure, but I would like to take me from home at 7:00 p.m. please, and I hope it isn’t an inconvenient time.
MR. MUDLLY: Don’t worry, lady Emily, I’ll come to take you at 7:00 p.m.
(Zoei enters with the tea)
ZOEI: Your tea my lady, Mr. Mudlly (She puts the tea on the table)
EMILY: Thank you Zoei.
ZOEI: You are well-
(Mr. Mudlle intrerupts her)
MR. MUDLLY: Well that was all. If you don’t mind, I will take my leave.
EMILY: Oh! You are leaving allredy?
MR. MUDLLY: Yes. I’m in a hurry with a bussines.
EMILY: If that’s all, then, thank you for coming to remember me. Have a good day.
MR. MUDLLY: Thank you, and also I hope you have a good day!
(Mr. Mudlly goes)







Scene 2:

(Is 7:00 p.m. in the night of the party. Mr. Mudlly arives at the mansion of lady Emily. He enters after seeing no one there.)
MR. MUDLLY: (Shouting) Hello! Lady Emily? Zoei? Is someone here?
(He saw Zoei lieing on the floor and try to wake her up. She woke up sudenly)
ZOEI: Lady Emily! Where is my lady?! Please help her!
Call the police! Please! (she starts crying)


Act 2

CHARACTERS: POLICEMAN 1; POLICEMAN 2; INS. HALFWAY; HOLMES; WATSON

Scene 1:

(Is 8:00 a.m. in the morning, after the party at the mansion of lady Emily. The cops closed the zone for searching for clues. Inspector Halfway is also there.)
POLICEMAN 1: Inspector!
INS. HALFWAY: What? Did you found something?
POLICEMAN 1: No, but someone entered the restricted zone, and want to speak with you.
INS. HALFWAY: What is his name?
POLICEMAN 1: He didn’t said.
(Policeman 2 and Holmes enter)
POLICEMAN 2: Hey stop! You can’t enter here!
(Ins. Halfway recognised Holmes)
INS. HALFWAY: Let him stay!
POLICEMAN 2; POLICEMAN 1: Inspector!
POLICEMAN 1: Do you know him?
INS. HALFWAY: Of course I know him. He is detective Holmes. Sherlock Holmes.
(The two policeman turn to Holmes)
POLICEMAN 1; POLICEMAN 2: Mr. Holmes!
POLICEMAN 1: We are sorry!
POLICEMAN 2: For being rude!
(Policeman 1 and Policeman 2 bow at the same time and hit their heads togeter)
HOLMES: Ha! Ha! Ha! Funny guys. Everithing is fine. You don’t have to be sorry.
INS. HALFWAY: Ok guys, you can go now. Please leave us alone for a little.
POLICEMAN 1; POLICEMAN 2: Yes Inspector! Mr. Holmes have a nice day.
(They go out)
HOLMES: Ha! Ha! Ha! Funny guys. I like them.
INS. HALFWAY: Ok Holmes. Why are you here
HOLMES: “Why?” you ask? Well I’ve come to see an old frend.
INS. HALFWAY: Sure… After disapering for two years?
HOLMES: Yes! Something like that.
(Watson is entering tired)
WATSON: Mr. Sherlock why do you run like this every time you se a restricted area? (He saw Ins. Halfway) Ins. Halfway sorry for the intrusion.
INS. HALFWAY: No problem Watson. I’m glad to see you again.
HOLMES: Allright guys. So Inspector, what do we have here (He is sudenly serious)

TO BE CONTINUED...

*imi cer scuze pentru greselile gramaticale

Well...that`s nice :-?

I`m not really used to this kind of prose, exceptin Caragiale`s well`known comedies but I thought it`d be nice to try something new.
I really enjoyed it at first, those characters gave me the feeling of reading something from the middle ages, their behaviour and that party, everything made me feel like watching an old movie...I don`t know why I just did. And then I saw Sherlock`s name. Then I started lovin` it.
About the gramatical errors...I think I saw some, buuuut I`m not really that good at english so I`ll let someone else to correct them.

And I`m really waiting for your next post, I really wanna know what happened to Emily.

Ph3niX a scris:
Act 1


Scene 1:

ZOEI: My lady, Mr Mudlly had come.
EMILY: Thank you for telling me. You may let him in.
(Mr. Mudlly enters)
MR. MUDLLY: Oh my, lady Emily you are as charming as ever. (Turns the head to Zoei) You can go now.
(She is staying and watching lady Emily)
MR. MUDLLY: I said go! You filty ma-
(Lady Emily intrerupts him)
EMILY: Zoei, please go and make a tea for Mr. Mudlly and me!
ZOEI: Yes my lady.
(She goes)
(Mr. Mudlly walks angry)
EMILY: And what bussines does it bring you here, today?
MR. MUDLLY: I’ve come to remember you that tomorrow is my sister's (nefolosind "'s"-ul ar fi ca si cum ai zice: "maine este ziua sora mea") birthday party.
EMILY: Oh! Of course I’ll come with pleasure, but I would like to take me from home at 7:00 p.m. please, and I hope it isn’t an inconvenient time.
MR. MUDLLY: Don’t worry, lady Emily, I’ll come to take you at 7:00 p.m.
(Zoei enters with the tea)
ZOEI: Your tea my lady, Mr. Mudlly (She puts the tea on the table)
EMILY: Thank you Zoei.
ZOEI: You are well-
(Mr. Mudlle intrerupts her)
MR. MUDLLY: Well that was all. If you don’t mind, I will take my leave.
EMILY: Oh! You are leaving already?
MR. MUDLLY: Yes. I’m in a hurry with a bussines.
EMILY: If that’s all, then, thank you for coming to remember me. Have a good day.
MR. MUDLLY: Thank you, and also I hope you have a good day!
(Mr. Mudlly goes)







Scene 2:

(Is 7:00 p.m. in the night of the party. Mr. Mudlly arives at the mansion of lady Emily. He enters after seeing no one there.)
MR. MUDLLY: (Shouting) Hello! Lady Emily? Zoei? Is someone here?
(He saw Zoei lieing on the floor and tried to wake her up. She woke up suddenly)
ZOEI: Lady Emily! Where is my lady?! Please help her!
Call the police! Please! (she starts crying)


Act 2

CHARACTERS: POLICEMAN 1; POLICEMAN 2; INS. HALFWAY; HOLMES; WATSON

Scene 1:

(Is 8:00 a.m. in the morning, after the party at the mansion of lady Emily. The cops closed the zone for searching for clues. Inspector Halfway is also there.)
POLICEMAN 1: Inspector!
INS. HALFWAY: What? Did you find something?
POLICEMAN 1: No, but someone entered the restricted zone, and wants to speak with you.
INS. HALFWAY: What is his name?
POLICEMAN 1: He didn’t say
(Policeman 2 and Holmes enter)
POLICEMAN 2: Hey stop! You can’t enter here!
(Ins. Halfway recognised Holmes)
INS. HALFWAY: Let him stay!
POLICEMAN 2; POLICEMAN 1: Inspector!
POLICEMAN 1: Do you know him?
INS. HALFWAY: Of course I know him. He is detective Holmes. Sherlock Holmes.
(The two policeman turn to Holmes)
POLICEMAN 1; POLICEMAN 2: Mr. Holmes!
POLICEMAN 1: We are sorry!
POLICEMAN 2: For being rude!
(Policeman 1 and Policeman 2 bow at the same time and hit their heads togeter)
HOLMES: Ha! Ha! Ha! Funny guys. Everithing is fine. You don’t have to be sorry.
INS. HALFWAY: Ok guys, you can go now. Please leave us alone for a little.
POLICEMAN 1; POLICEMAN 2: Yes Inspector! Mr. Holmes have a nice day.
(They go out)
HOLMES: Ha! Ha! Ha! Funny guys. I like them.
INS. HALFWAY: Ok Holmes. Why are you here
HOLMES: “Why?” you ask? Well I’ve come to see an old frend.
INS. HALFWAY: Sure… After disappearing for two years?
HOLMES: Yes! Something like that.
(Watson is entering tired)
WATSON: Mr. Sherlock why are you running like this every time you see a restricted area? (He saw Ins. Halfway) Ins. Halfway sorry for the intrusion.
INS. HALFWAY: No problem Watson. I’m glad to see you again.
HOLMES: Allright (forma corecta este "alright") guys. So Inspector, what do we have here (He is sudenly serious)

TO BE CONTINUED...

*imi cer scuze pentru greselile gramaticale

Aualeu, timpurile astea... e grele, grele rau. (ti-am modificat ce este gresit)
Ideea in general pare interesanta. Sper sa il continui cat de curand si sa incerci sa te exprimi mai bine data viitoare .

Multa bafta.

umm...dude....nu se presupunea sa scriem,nu stiu,in romana?
Adica,ce a scris si Gwoomba,macar sa fi sigur ca scrii corect in romana...Bonus ca,dupa cum observi,forumul este ''pus'' pe limba romana(asta vezi si cand iti corecteaza greselile de scriere)
In rest ce sa spun,dragut...da nu la fel de tari ca ale lui rasen...

SaberSlashS a scris:umm...dude....nu se presupunea sa scriem,nu stiu,in romana?
Adica,ce a scris si Gwoomba,macar sa fi sigur ca scrii corect in romana...Bonus ca,dupa cum observi,forumul este ''pus'' pe limba romana(asta vezi si cand iti corecteaza greselile de scriere)
In rest ce sa spun,dragut...da nu la fel de tari ca ale lui rasen...

Da, aici sunt complet de acord cu tine. Este adevarat ca "Sherlock Holmes" este de origine engleza, eu nu am nimic impotriva faptului ca tu ai scris in engleza, dar daca nu esti sigur ca poti stapani o limba diferita fata de limba ta materna foloseste limba romana.
Acum, banuiesc ca daca ai inceput intr-un fel, trebuie sa continui in acel fel. Asa ca, succes in continuare

Multumesc ...
Iar textul l-am facut in limba engleza deoarece profa de engleza m-a pus sa-l fac pentru inspectie....

Nu-mi dau seama de ce nu am scris aici încă. Anyway, frumoasă idee, dar stai rău cu engleza. Ți-o spun pe șleau, ai de lucrat la ea. Sunt admirabile efortul și ideea, dar, după cum vezi, și ceilalți useri spun că ar trebui să fii mai atent când scrii în engleză. Poate să rogi pe cineva să arunce un ochi înainte să postezi și să fii acolo, lângă el, să vezi și să înțelegi unde și de ce ai greșit. Altfel, după primul post nu aș putea să îmi fac o impresie clară, dar aștept continuarea să vedem cum continuă povestea.